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Fluff_The_Cuppy-cake Vice Captain
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 Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 4:17 pm
Okay so, before ya'll read this, I just wanted to say that I live in Washinton (state, not D.C.) so you're not confused. I wrote this about a year ago when I was really inspired to write poetry.
Washington
The sky threatens
To spill its tears
On the vast forests
Of evergreen trees.
Seagulls cry softly
As the tide flows
In and out, slowly,
By the will of the moon.
Over the mountains
The great star burns hot,
Heating large fields
Of corn and wheat.
The sky smiles down
Like shallow blue waters;
Occasional clouds,
Like lonely blue icebergs.
These two parts--
Brother and sister;
Hot and cold--
Make the whole that
I call home;
Washington.
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:03 pm
Very good!
I really like how you discribe things. I don't know about anyone else, but I can really see...... washington 3nodding
I think you should write more often stare *hint* hint* .... lol
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Posted: Tue Feb 02, 2010 4:31 pm
I like it,
(and some of the words in it helped me with homework XD)
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Posted: Wed Feb 03, 2010 7:09 pm
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Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2010 1:41 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2012 9:25 am
Fluff_The_Cuppy-cake Okay so, before ya'll read this, I just wanted to say that I live in Washinton (state, not D.C.) so you're not confused. I wrote this about a year ago when I was really inspired to write poetry. Washington The sky threatens To spill its tears On the vast forests Of evergreen trees. Seagulls cry softly As the tide flows In and out, slowly, By the will of the moon. Over the mountains The great star burns hot, Heating large fields Of corn and wheat. The sky smiles down Like shallow blue waters; Occasional clouds, Like lonely blue icebergs. These two parts-- Brother and sister; Hot and cold-- Make the whole that I call home; Washington. THATS REALLY GOOD! If you live in Washington D.C I can't relate to you as much but I live in Portland so your poem totally makes sense! It's really good and I like the metaphors! Keep up at your writing! You're an amazing writer!
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