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PostPosted: Fri Apr 30, 2010 11:25 am


ok so I wrote this a while ago & Posted it on my guild so if you want to read it just fallow the link:

http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=18324801

& feedback would be very much apreaciated(Sp?) so if you read it thank you & I hope you like it & if you don't then ... *shrug* to each their own

Thank you for your time.
PostPosted: Fri Apr 30, 2010 3:42 pm


I really like it, it was kind of hard to get into at the beginning but in about the middle it got better. the only thing is that there was a really large block of text at the beginning and where you told how his father died. its kinda hard to read.
hope you write more

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 30, 2010 9:51 pm


ok thank you, I really will try to write more!

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